Bah Humbug Six Fic

[teeceeoh]

Most of my forays into the world of fan fiction have involved a Twelfth Doctor plus companion that I created solely because I do not believe myself capable of doing established Doctors and their companions justice.

I have, however, made several attempts at doing so. The one in question was meant to be a Sixth Doctor short story for a competition, but never got finished. Reminds me of that time I went to Spain and saw all those partially-built houses that seemed to have been simply abandoned.

But I digress. The competition in question was for Christmas of last year, but I'm contemplating trying to finish it for this year, instead. This shows you how far I got, which is not very: teeceeoh.deviantart.com/art/DW-Bah-Humbug-Ch-1-105982011

I was wondering if I could have your opinions on it?

[merrythemad]

teee hee hee the walmart plantary group, what a darn scary thought. I like it and I say finish finish! Where did Six go, and why?

[lostspook]

Well, here are my thoughts:

1. You should definitely finish a fic that involves Six and Peri going to a Christmas Planet. You owe it to the world.

2. You seem to have their voices down find to me.

3. I think I might alter that second line 'doing her ablutions' - maybe performing her morning ablutions or preferably just she got up, washed, dressed - it's something that notices because it's so very early into the fic. As ever when I comment, feel free to completely ignore me - I am often wrong!

4. I am a nitpicker!

Yes, I like it and I am all for a bit of DW Christmas fic at the right season.

[teeceeoh]

Don't worry about making suggestions, lostspook. It's a fair comment you made. I feel there are a number of other changes I need to make, though not quite sure what at the moment. Though I will point out that it's only Peri left at the Christmas Planet. The title might give a hint of what Six ends up doing.

Oh, and you can nitpick to your heart's content. It doesn't bother me one bit.